Sunday, 16 January 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #9

Hi, and welcome to my latest Six! First off, I would like to say a big thank you to everyone who commented on last week's post, and extra sprinkles for the compliments on the blog design. :-D Sadly I haven't yet written much more for my tentacled friend Elladora and her shell-shocked companion Edric but I'll try to bring you more of them in the very near future.
In the meantime, this 6 is completely new and the story doesn't even have a name yet. The idea only started with the turn of the New Year and is developing as a dark fantasy instead of my usual scifi. These are the opening lines, and if they'd been hand-written the ink would still be wet.



She drifted into the village like a pall of grey smoke breaking free from the heavy mists beyond. The Faithful came to meet her with the traditional welcome of drawn weapons, even though the Patriarch himself had begged for her presence.

'Must we go through this tiresome charade every time?' she demanded of the foremost devotee, her pencil-fine eyebrows drawn together in a frown. In answer, he merely raised the plain, badly-wrought sword he held in a hand that trembled, and she sighed. 'As you wish then.'

There was a whisper of sound and a deadly flash of silver swirled with grey, followed by a dull thud as the first of the Faithful collapsed to the ground.


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24 comments:

  1. Eek! Um, was that supposed to happen?!

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  2. That can't be part of the tiresome charade! Intriguing!

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  3. That doesn't sound good! Great writing, btw!!!

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  4. I love your description! Very intriguing.

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  5. I want more! I love that last line. You have a way with descriptions.

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  6. Fantastic opening! You've hooked me.

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  7. Whoa! Now that is one hell of a beginning!

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  8. Pall of grey smoke. Whisper of sound. Wonderful.

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  9. Gulp. I'd read on. Great opening.

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  10. Get to writing! I want lots more of this. Very good hook

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  11. Dark indeed! Reminds me of early Tannith Lee

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  12. OK, really want to know what's happening now.

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  13. And then what happened? I'm hooked! Great set up :)

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  14. Intriguing setup, thanks for sharing!

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  15. Love it--especially the last sentence. Magical.

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  16. Wonderful! Such a gripping description and unexpected turn of events.

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