Sunday 10 June 2012

Six Sentence Sunday #56

Hello! Welcome to another #sixsunday post, and a big thank you to everyone who stops by and comments. I'm continuing with my sfr story Tethered this week. Genetically engineered assasin Tyree of the Su has just met the human she's been assigned to guard and work with. Having had no image of him, she's shocked when he reveals the scars left by a previous attempt on his life.

“Striking, aren’t they?” he said. 
She forced herself to meet his gaze squarely, although the heat over her skin told her she was blushing like a scolded youngster. His voice reminded her of sweetened capprey: smooth, soothing, and yet with a hint of bitterness at its heart. Had he done this deliberately? To test her?
Very striking, she said, holding her tone steady.

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15 comments:

  1. Great show of her inner turmoil. :-)

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  2. Ooh, lots of lovely tension there. Adore the hint of bitterness at its heart.

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  3. Such undercurrent there. Snagged by the feeling he's testing her.

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  4. He sounds like a very intriguing character.

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  5. Love how you described her blush. The relationship between these two will be very interesting as it evolves. Looking forward to following them!

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  6. I'm not sure what's more intriguing, his reason or her reaction. Lots of possibilities you're building into this relationship.

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  7. Good for her. She sounds like a good match for him. Excellent descriptions.

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  8. What an awesome scene. It was a challenge and she met it. It makes him interesting and her admirable. Love this snippet.

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  9. I like this. Any idea when it will be out?

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    1. Thanks. At the moment this is still a rough draft WIP, so not even ready for submission yet. :(

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  10. What is sweetened capprey? Her blush was well handled. I never know how to write those in a showing not telling way.

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    1. Oh, capprey is their version of coffee. And thank you. :)

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  11. Great description of his voice! Love it. :)

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