Sunday 20 February 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #14

Hi all and welcome to another six. Big thanks to all those who visit, and especially to those who comment.
This 6 is from another WIP still untitled, but it's a prequel to my current MS Keir. Quin is meeting her soul mate Darion who is in human form for the first time. Read, hopefully enjoy, and then check out the other Six Sentences here!


Quin stood at the balcony and shivered, though not with cold. Her heart raced in a mixture of apprehension and excitement, and she felt as though every inch of her skin had been brushed by fingers of sunlight. It both thrilled and frightened her to feel like that. For all those years that Darion had shared her mind, she still felt that she really knew nothing about him at all, not as a person. Not as a man.
‘You know my heart,’ a voice murmured, and she turned to face him.

© 2009-2011 Copyright Philippa J. Green All Rights Reserved

31 comments:

  1. "Fingers of sunlight."
    " You know my heart."

    Verra nice.

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  2. Yep, the fingers of sunlight and that final line got me too.

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  3. I loved the two lines that both Taryn and Marie mentioned. They grab at my own heart. Excellent writing!

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  4. I loved this six. Very very nice.

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  5. I'm with everyone else. Great six!

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  6. That last line got me! Nice snippet. So sweet.

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  7. Ooh, love the build-up to that last line!

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  8. Oh! I gasped on the last line. Nice work.

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  9. I'll echo the others, that last line is a heartbreaker. Lovely.

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  10. A very haunting sentence. "You know my heart". Nice!

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  11. I agree with all the comments above and love the "fingers of sunlight." Love the tension in this scene as she faces reconciling the external man she's going to see for the first time with the internal being she knows so well.

    Hope you post more of this scene next week.

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  12. Ahh, not fair, I want to see him!! Great job.

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  13. "You know my heart" - that's beautiful.

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  14. And? What an awful place to cut off. Great six though.

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  15. "you know my heart" ok, I officially melted right then

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  16. Agree with all the comments about 'You know my heart' ... Brilliantly said, Darion!

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  17. That was so incredibly sweet. Wow.

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  18. Pip, I know you know this, but your writing is nothing short of amazing. This piece made me literally catch my breath - and tears come to my eyes.

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  19. And then what? What does he look like? *bites nails*

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  20. Very nice. I like the timid curiosity in this piece.

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  21. Definitely attention grabbing. I want to know about their mental connection. :)

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  22. I love all the history packed into these sentences.

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  23. Brushed by sunlight...great line!

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  24. Nice images here, and you portray her uncertainty very poignantly.

    Great snippet/

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  25. You know my heart... oh my! Love it :)

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  26. WOW! This is a huge hook!

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  27. oooo....love the 'brushed with fingers of sunlight'

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  28. "You know my heart." Oh, I have to know what happens next! Very tantalizing.

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  29. I am so envious of the psychic connection between soulmates there. Great six!

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